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英语胜经

GUANG DONG JIAO YU GAO ZHONG

读后续写读什么、怎么读

■广州市天河区教师发展中心汪万芹

众所周知，做好读后续写的前提是充分理解已给的阅读

材料，只有读懂所给材料，才能续写好后面的内容。从历年

的续写题来看，原文都是故事类的记叙文，记叙文的阅读方

式有相对固定的模式，下面举例说明读什么，怎么读。

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,

使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Alex

stared

through

the

cabin

(小

ness

.

Soon

his

dad

would

call

him

.

MWe*re

ready

,**

Dad

said

as

he

came

in

from

the

passage

.

Alex

looked

up

.

Surely

enough

,

there

was

the

moon

.

And

he

could

see

the

shoreline

and

the

dark

forms

of

trees

.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph

1:

Looking

into

the

trees

on

the

shore

,

Alex

noticed

tiny

points

of

light

twinkling

(闪烁）

there

.

“

Grab

your

pole

.”

Alex

turned

away

from

the

window

and

slowly

picked

up

his

fishing

pole

.

“

We

should

have

done

this

before

,”

Dad

said

. “

Let’s

go

catching

a

big

one

!

Maybe

we

can

see

some

rare

insects

and

an

­

imals

,

such

as

fireflies

(蛮火虫

）and

whippoorwills

(夜鹰）! ”

Dad

picked

up

his

tackle

box

，

pole

,

and

bait

(馆

）can

from

the

passageway

.

They

walked

down

the

hill

toward

the

lake

.

The

only

thing

Alex

could

see

was

the

circle

of

weeds

and

rocks

at

their

feet

.

Insect

voices

filled

his

ears

.

Hundreds

of

insects

waited

in

the

dark

to

attack

.

M

Mosquitoes,MDad

said

.

UI

brought

some

spray

Paragraph

2:

Alex

didn't

answer

.

He

had

never

heard

such

an

odd

,

excit

­

ing

birdcall—sad

but

zippy

(活泼的)•

(喷剂）

t。keep

them

off

.”

Suddenly

something

rushed

past

Alex’s

head

.

He

gasped

.

“What

was

that

?”

“Probably

a

bat

，”

Dad

said

.

一、速读——抓要素，理情节

对于记叙文的六要素，即5

W

1

H

的问题，大家一定很熟

悉，因此，在快速阅读原文后，不难找到人物、时间、地点、

事情、原因、方式，如下表。

Who

Where

When

What

Why

How

Alex

,

his

dad

On

the

lake

At

night

Going

fishing

To

catch

fish

Fishing

in

the

middle

of

the

water

in

the

dark

‘‘

Will

bats

be

flying

around

our

heads

the

whole

time

?”

“This

is

their

time

to

be

out

catching

insects

，”

Dad

explained

.

“They

won’t

hurt

you

.”

He

pushed

the

boat

off

the

small

stones

and

jumped

in

.

Dad

rowed

to

the

middle

of

the

lake

and

stopped

. “

We’ll

just

let

the

boat

drift

(漂流

）for

a

while

.

Keep

the

flashlight

in

the

bottom

of

the

boat

.

The

fish

won't

bite

if

they

see

light

flash

­

ing

around

.

When

we*ve

done

baiting

our

hooks

(^),

we

*11

turn

the

light

off

.”

Leaning

down

to

get

closer

to

the

light

,

Alex

tried

to

thread

a

worm

on

his

hook，but

he

couldn’t

seem

to

work

his

fingers

right

.

So

what

if

the

worm

(竊虫

）was

only

partly

on

the

hook

?

He

didn’t

want

to

fish

anyway

.

He

didn’t

even

want

to

be

here

.

Dad

switched

off

the

flashlight

,

and

the

night

fell

over

them

like

a

heavy

cape

(斗篷

).“I

can’t

see

anything，，，Alex

said

weakly

.

“The

moon’s

half

full

.

It

gives

us

some

light

，”

Dad

said

.

二、细读——知人物，找冲突

第二遍细读，目标是找到反映人物性格特点的描写，包

括人物的动作、对话、心理等（如下页表）。在第1段中，

Dad

说了两个简短的句子 “

We’re

ready

,”

“Grab

your

pole

.”，

反映出他对夜钓的期待与兴奋；而

Alex

则是

slowly

picked

up

his

fishing

pole

,

slowly

一词则表明他的态度与父亲截然相反，

他没有那么高兴，似乎是不情愿地做了爸爸的跟班。

从第 4 段前两句

Insect

voices

filled

his

ears

.

Hundreds

of

bugs

waited

in

the

dark

to

attack

看出

，Alex

对于夜晚的野外环

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Alex

Dad

则交代结局。

这时，阅读两段的段首句十分重要。第一段首句：

Look

­

ing

into

the

trees

on

the

shore

，

Alex

noticed

tiny

points

of

light

twinkling

there

•读到这里，我们不禁要问

：What

arc

those

tiny

points

of

light

?

...

and

slowly

picked

up

“

We，re

ready

,”

“Grab

your

pole

.”

his

fishing

pole

should

have

done

this

be

­

see

was

the

circle

of

weeds

fore

,”

Dad

said

. “

Let’s

go

catching

and

rocks

at

their

feet

.

a

big

one

!”

Hundreds

of

bugs

waited

in

the

dark

to

attack

.

The

only

thing

Alex

could

“We

根据本句的提7

K

the

trees

和

twinkling

,结合前

文描写夜晚的野外自然环境，再联系我们对大自然的知识，

不难推断出这些一闪一闪的光点就是萤火虫。接着，我们要

问

：What

will

Alex

feel

about

them

?

Will

he

still

feel

afraid

of

them

“

Mosquitoes

，”

Dad

said

.

“I

brought

some

spray

to

keep

them

off

.”

“Will

bats

be

flying

around 4*This

is

their

time

to

be

out

catch

­

our

heads

the

whole

ing

insects,MDad

explained

.

“They

won’t

hurt

you

.”

time

?”

再看续写的第二段首句

：Akx

didn’t

answer

.

He

had

never

heard

such

an

odd

,

exciting

birdcall--sad

but

zippy

(活泼的).显

然，这里有人问了

Alex

问题，但是，由于沉浸在

birdcall

中

他没有应答，这种鸟鸣是怪怪的、令人激动的、有些忧伤但

又是活泼的，作者连用四个形容词来描述

Alex

听到鸟鸣的感

受，注意这四个词的感情色彩，前两个一个中性（

odd

), —个

褒义（

exciti

吨)；后两个中虽使用了

sad

,但

but

表明说话者更

强调后者，也就是说着重在

zippy

上。因此，明显可以看出

Alex

很享受自然界的鸟鸣声，结合上一段看到的点点萤火虫

...

he

couldn’t

seem

to

The

fish

won't

bite

if

they

see

work

his

fingers

right

.

light

flashing

around

.

When

we’ve

done

baiting

our

hooks

，

we’ll

turn

the

light

off

.”

He

didn’t

want

to

fish

“The

moon’s

half

full

.

It

gives

us

anyway

.

He

didn*t

even

some

light

,”

want

to

be

here

.

光，不难推断出

Alex

对大自然的喜爱，到此，小男孩完成了

境非常陌生，感到危机四伏，觉得“在黑暗中成百上千的虫

子会伺机攻击”他；对于他的反应，

Dad

说“

Mosquitoes

,”

“

I

brought

some

spray

to

keep

them

off

.” 这里，我们是不是能

看出

Dad

非常熟悉野外自然环境，应对蚊子叮咬很有经验？

同时，细心的读者也能借助同理心，看出父亲很关注儿子的

反应，耐心帮助他克服障碍。同理，在接下来的5~7段关于

bats

的问题讨论，通过父子间的对话，勾勒出儿子对于大自

对自然界的恐惧到欣赏的心理转变。

结合前面阅读的冲突分析，续写部分的主要内容是：

Alex

看到萤火虫，点点萤光美不胜收，爸爸关切地询问；

Alex

没有回答，因为他听到了鸟鸣声，沉浸其中，一扫对大

自然的恐惧，取而代之的是由衷的喜爱。

总之，分步骤阅读原文，抓住要素、理清情节、分析人

物、找到冲突；再读已给的段首句，确定情节的发展以及故

事的结局，做完这些准备工作，我们就可以动笔写了。

附：参考范文

Looking into the trees on the shore, Alex noticed tiny points

of light twinkling there.

The

longer

he

looked

,

the

more

flashes

he

saw

.

Hundreds

of

them

!

They

looked

like

stars

coming

down

from

the

sky

.

Alex*s

eyes

were

shining

with

excitement

.

然缺乏了解而感到害怕，和父亲对大自然了如指掌形成鲜明

反差。

以上是举例说明在第二次阅读中，要留意找到反映人物

性格特点的描写，大家可以用不同颜色的笔标示出不同人物

的描写，然后用关键词总结出人物的性格，如下表：

“

What

was

Alex

&

unwilling

to

go

Afraid

of

darkness

&

wildness

ed

to

go

Dad

that

”

Alex

asked

curiously

. “

Fireflies

.”

Dad

answered

with

a

Unfamiliar

with

fishing

at

night

Experienced

at

fishing

&

excit

-

big

smile

.

Alex

reached

out

to

touch

the

small

“

spirits

”

and

they

just

danced

gracefully

(优雅地

)and

quietly

around

him

in

the

darkness

.

Absorbed

,

he

was

pulled

back

to

reality

by

a

clear

and

nice

birdcall

. “

It’s

whippoorwill

!

Isn*t

it

beautiful?t，Dad

whis

­

Experienced

&

caring

“没有冲突，不成故事”，好故事会借助冲突来展现人物

并揭示主题。从以上人物性格分析可以清楚地看出，故事到

此展露出两方面的冲突：一是人物之间的冲突，对于夜钓，

兴冲冲的爸爸和不情愿的儿子；二是人物与环境的冲突，

Alex

对野外环境的陌生和恐惧。在这二者中，后者是主要冲

pered

gently

.

Alex

didn*t

answer

.

He

had

never

heard

such

an

odd

,

excit

­

ing

birdcall

--

sad

but

zippy

(活泼的

).It

blocked

out

everything

else

.

Actually

the

other

night

creatures

seemed

to

stay

quiet

for

a

while

to

listen

to

the

whippoorwill

.

Smiling

,

Alex

reeled

in

(拉起）

his

line

,

put

on

a

wonn

and

cast

out

again

.

They

only

got

three

fish

,

so

small

that

they

put

them

back

into

the

lake

.

When

back

to

the

cabin

,

Alex

saw

his

Mom

and

whispered

to

her

, “

Mom

A

whippoorwill

!”

突，因为一旦解决了

Alex

与大自然的冲突，即他不再害怕大

自然，那么，也就很自然地会转变对于夜钓的态度。

三、定发展与结局

找到了冲突，也就为后面的续写提供了方向，基本上，

接下来的两个段落中，一段要交代故事的继续发展，另一段

,

listen

!

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