2024年5月14日发(作者：)

2021南京盐城高三一模

Henry got on his bike and began to deliver copies of the March 8,1970, issue of The

Gazette. Half an hour later,he threw the last newspaper onto the porch(门廊) at 35

Oak Street and cycled to The Gazette offices. There must be something important for

the editor in chief to meet with an 11-year-old paperboy.

"No good way to deliver bad news," Mr. Trotta greeted him when Henry stepped in.

Henry's smile faded.

"We're closing shop, Henry. Advertising is down. Television is how people get their

news today. Local papers are the first to close." shrugged.

Henry couldn’t believe his ears, frozen to the spot. He thought of all hose people he

had met on his route. They wouldn't get their neighborhood news anymore!

You were great, Henry--always dependable," Mr. Trotta said. Henry forced his head

up to say good-bye.

As he rode past the houses he knew so well he saw on his porch, holding

a broom(扫帚). Henry led him to a chair and cleaned the porch. They sat for a while as Mr.

Grady recalled how happy he'd been moving his family to 10 Oak. He sounded lonely.

A week after his last deliveries, Henry wondered if his customers missed The

Gazette as much as he did. He thought of a way to find out. He started out on his old

route with a notebook.

Henry stopped at Mrs. Burke's. She opened the door, holding the two babies. She

asked him if he knew any neighbors with experience of looking after children.

Mr. Simon was next door, carrying his violin out. "Hey, Henry. My band is having a

concert in the park his Friday. Tell ll your friends."

As Henry made more notes, an idea started forming in his head. Maybe he could

create a newsy page(小报) for the neighbors.

Neighbors cheered Henry's idea, ready to offer information. ___________________________

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Henry's first Oak Street News then produced desired effects. ___________________________

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一、读取信息

文章的情节是：Henry失业了，报纸倒闭了，他不甘心，于是想看看左邻右舍在

没有报纸的现实中有哪些需求，结果发现大家生活很是不便，于是萌生办小报的

想法，没想到邻居们非常赞同。

本文原文属于problem-solution类，不同的是，所给的信息已经告知solution，

然后考生只需要写solution的具体化，分：过程和结果。所以考生不要老是想

solution都有了，我怎么写？续写是文学创作，文学创作要求你能把一个点丰富

起来（但不要过度），同时还要由一个点拓展自然带出另外一个点，形成一串珠

子。这里面是需要创造思维和逻辑思维的，肯定是需要训练的，否则很可能你的

作文被你带到沟里去了。思维不当，后面写都是无用功。

了解情节后，注意提取文章的clues：

报纸倒闭：Advertising is down. Television is how people get their news

today Local papers are the first to close.

They wouldn't get their neighborhood news anymore!

人物：

Henry的老板：Mr. Trotta

Henry：he rode past the houses he knew so well.

Mr. Grady: He sounded lonely

Mrs. Burke: if he knew any neighbors with experience of looking after

children.

Mr. Simon : My band is having a concert in the park this Friday

说明一下，不可能每一个clue在最后都可能照应到，我的做法是：尽可能覆盖。

分主次，有些clues在续写中作为路人甲出现，有些作为主题呈现的代言人。

我们把clue分类：

可以作为报纸内容例子类：

Mr. Grady: He sounded lonely

Mrs. Burke: if he knew any neighbors with experience of looking after

children.

Mr. Simon : My band is having a concert in the park this Friday

这三人可以作为第二段或第一段中报纸有关的例子（譬如如何成功了，如何提供

帮助了），同时要考虑能否用一句话表达清楚报纸最后都解决了他们的需求，譬

如孤独的人不再孤独了。

Henry不用多说，肯定是主人公了，如何刻画他的努力和性格；

Mr. Trotta很容易被忽略，但是原文一大半都是写他，虽然他是个引子，但是我

设计可以通过他的口来表达主题。

二、提炼主题

一般学生都能想到：邻里之间的helpful， kind，Hery的warm-hearted

这当然没有问题，但是我们想想，文章高频词是Henry的报纸啊，高频词一定不

能疏忽，那么你把paper，neighbours’ kindness and help, Henry放在一起，

你就明白了：报纸就是一个纽带。

这样主题就来了，可以在最后通过象征性手法，也可以说是比喻，来表达主题。

三、根据提示句，列出场景。

无论多难写的作文，都不要坐在那发愣，文学创作向来都是万事开头难。列场景

是最快捷的方式

方法：

1.提示句里的关键词带出衔接句

2.每个人物各自的反应（A的action，B的response，如此反复，这个action

也可以是心理活动，动作描写等等）

如果人物多，就要学会分类，譬如这里的邻居是作为一个整体写，还是单个人代

表整体写，都可以的。

我的场景：

第一段场景：

1.邻居的帮助（提示句有neighbours，后面接着写他们，也可以根据information

来举例内容）

的感谢

的行动

4.报纸开始运行

第二段场景：

d effects是什么：可以从Henry的视角写

. Trotta的困惑

说出了真相：人们需要的不只是报纸，而是一个社会纽带，它带来的不

只是方便，还有爱和善良。

必须说明：这个场景肯定不是唯一的，答案就不是这样，答案是Mr. Trotta帮助

Henry促成这件事。

说明的是，在我的写作中我已经只在3000课标词中用词，我认为很够

了，而且高三后期必须关注3000词的相关方面的分类：

下水文1：

Neighbours cheered Henry’s idea, ready to offer information.

Mr. Simon even enthusiastically recommended a press to help him with

the printing free of charge. Close to tears, Henry thanked them over and

over again. There followed busy days, when Henry shuttled between

familiar houses for news covering different needs and notice. Everything

ready, the newsy page was eventually in business. Before it went to

press, Henry’s neighbours gave the paper a good name – Oak Street

News.

（写作说明：写人物感情时，我几乎没有用任何高大上的套词，就副词，形容词，

介词短语，我越来越发现效果不错。

如何串联场景，表示接下来发生了什么事： There followed busy days,

穿梭于……，说明很忙）

Henry’s first Oak Street News then produced desired effects.

Mr. Simon’s concert was held successfully, Mr. Grady made new friends,

and Mrs. Burke also had a babysitter. How happy he was to see his

efforts pay off and his paper serve its purpose! One day, he received a

call from Mr. Trotta, asking curiously, “Boy, never can I imagine a newsy

page can flourish. How come?” “Sir, it’s not just a newsy page, but a

social bond,” answered Henry proudly. In his heart, Oak Street News not

only brought locals convenience, but wove love and kindness in each

piece of information they offered.

(161 words)

写作说明：

1.表达人物心情有多种方式，感叹句就是一种

2.结尾我还是喜欢用这种模式：主题导入（对话/环境/动作），+主题肯

定（心理，对话，总结）

下水文2：

Neighbors cheered Henry's idea, ready to offer information.

Besides

Mrs. Burke who longed for a baby sitter and Mr. Simon who desired

a large audience for his concert, Henry also collected six other

neighbors' appealing and needs, including Mr. Grady who yearned

for his children's coming back for a short reunion. Information in

hand, Henry knocked at Mr. Trotta's door and pleaded for his

support in publishing his first

Oak Street News

, who approved

almost immediately. Soon, Henry's tabloid was in circulation, which

he cheerfully delivered from door to door as before.

Henry's first Oak Street News then produced desired

effects.

Neighbors applauded the idea of sharing their needs in a

communal newspaper, which really addressed their immediate

concern in a practical and efficient way. As Mrs. Burke successfully

found an ideal baby sitter, Mr. Simon secured a large following for

his concert and Mr. Grady who happily reunited with his kids, Henry

realized, from his deep heart, that

The Gazette

was far from gone in

this TV era, but transformed into

Oak Street News

that connected,

bonded and tied the Oak neighbors in a cozy fabric.

试题答案：

Neighbors cheered Henry’s idea, ready to offer information. Some shared

their interesting family stories while others advertised giveaways. Mrs.

Burke and Mr. Simon requested Henry to release their information on the

first issue. Henry also added: “Stories told by friendly gentleman at 10

Oak. Stop by to chat.” He typed all the news and named the paper Oak

Street News. After hearing about Henry’s story, Mr. Trotta was so moved

by his commitment that he offered to photocopy the paper free of charge.

(75W)

Henry’s first Oak Street News then produced desired effects. The

neighbors were thrilled to read their own news in their community.

Furthermore, they responded actively to the updates. To Mrs. Burke’s

delight, several applied to babysit her two kids. Mr. Simon’s concert also

attracted a larger audience. Henry’s paper gradually became the

centralized chain to spread about what was happening all around and

helped the community run more smoothly. Although Henry had lost his

old Gazette job, he launched something, too, making news and

connecting neighbors. (77W)